For one of my school assignments, I chose to do a trial run of a couple pages of DFS to get a feel for where I’m at, comic-making wise. And I’m not exactly doing backflips over it, but I do know where to go from here. I promised myself I wouldn’t point all these awful flaws (apropos of absolutely nothing, perspective is really hard when you’ve been bullshitting it your whole career). So hey, let’s play critique bingo! Maybe you see something I don’t.
This is the actual script so far. These would be… pages 8-11 of the first chapter, approx. It’s the first time we meet Glenn, and a pretty calm scene considering the two incredibly violent ones it’s stuck between. AND WOWEE BEE, LOOK AT THAT EXPOSITION.